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                                                                                                       2012 image,Goa




 What        I                About             As
        do            have              uproars                 tides
               I                 said                 of                       rise     
                   tell                   it                   silent                    and
                        thee               all                        seas                      fall

                        love              call                        ears                     wall
                  with               its'                    my                        the
              heart             to                  reach                     in
       your           listen            sounds                  cracks
Unburden     And          Faint           Through

~~payal~~
Playing with the  Double Pictorial format for poets on the page..I find it a bit confusing so here is an easier read..
Listen..
What do I tell thee
I have said it all
About uproars of silent seas
As tides rise and fall
Unburden your heart with love
And listen to its' call
Faint sounds reach my ears
Through cracks in the wall
~~payal~~
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6 comments:

  1. TO TOUCH THE HORIZONNovember 14, 2013

    beautiful payal...even I was thinking about the prompt. Pictorial is confusing. at the first go I couldn't understand a thing..then I read the simpler version. loved it.

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    1. payal agarwalNovember 14, 2013

      Thanks a lot..Yes,specially the double pictorial..Yesterday,I read about the format so many times and thought of not attempting..but still it's ok to try...Put up along with the simpler version whenever you write..:)

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  2. Deepti AgarwalNovember 14, 2013

    Its Pictorial representation is a bit different .. But its fun to try.

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    1. payal agarwalNovember 14, 2013

      I was quite ok with it..It's double pictorial actually..

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  3. Amiya chatterjeeNovember 14, 2013

    "Easier Read " is most suitable for a dumbo like me.
    Simple but sophisticated.
    I am not sure of the use of THEE.
    Atleast I wouldnt when " Faint sounds reach my ears"
    Pray , what loving sound ??

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